Lu,

First of all I want to say how much I enjoyed the contest you created, you always come up with interesting ideas that expand our club as writers and for that I must thank you. I must also say congrats on winning a place in this challenge, I thought it was really well deserved..

Your style has changed quite abit as of late and I love it. I like both the older way you write and the newer. I believe that when you read poetry of others you really take in the style that you like and your like a sponge haha.. I think you have the mind to learn anything but you've created quite your own style here and it interests me muchly. I loved the format of this piece, I don't know how many times I can say it but when you write in this format with wording like you do it really allows me to grasp onto your words.

"Suitcase of a dreamer's tears
hidden in a closet of darkness. .
Where skeletons dangle
damaged and broken.
-solitary traveler-"

My favorite stanza above, I liked this because of the use of skeletons, I havn't read too much about skeletons as of late and the imagery you created into my mind I liked. It was dark and it really helped with the understanding of this poem. I felt when reading this is came directly from your heart, like an open book you poured yourself out.. I loved this piece, and even though i've read others by you that I loved more the emotion was raw and I felt that was the most important thing of the poem.. the fact that emotion came first.

"Sticks and stones
may break my bones"

I liked the use of the quoted above, because it comes from a vulnerable place to me, too me it's kind of ironic because it's something sung by innocent children and yet it has a sinister feel behind it.. I think it worked well here, because it shows how one sweet and innocent has been weathered by the storm..
I also liked how im comparison to the memories haunting you it seems as though you'd take the broken bones any day just like I would, as you know they heal but the painful memories never do.

Overall I thought this was a clever piece which I enjoyed reading. Well done.

-Mel

I really enjoyed this Lu and I think you took a step outside your usual here because I did not guess it was yours. It was a pleasant surprise.

"Suitcase of a dreamer's tears
hidden in a closet of darkness. .
Where skeletons dangle
damaged and broken.
-solitary traveler-"

The opening made me think of painting and this gave me some inspiration for the canvas, it was my favorite stanza. I think you paint a good picture here with your word choice.

great job!

Luanne
Another wonderful piece you have penned. I love the way the poem went through different stages of your life. I could feel the sadness, pain and yes love through your words.

Soul embraces ... time
and the growing tranquility
of dawning light.
Adoration replaces fake smiles
as a charcoal smudge
becomes
life.
- motherhood journey -

This was my favorite part. I think because our children give us our greatest joy in life.
Excellent job!
Take care
*hugs
Cindy

I like the word choice and your use of metaphors. Good imagery and a deep meaning that is up for interpretation. Great job!

Good use of words and nicely constructed lines. The opening of this poem is fantastic. Wonderful write!

Congrats on the win Luu<33...

Congrats Babe!!! Awesomely deserved =) <3

Congratulations Luanne with you well deserved win.

The wording was a little disjointed to me otherwise a good piece.