Very nice, I like the scene you set and the mood as well, your flow was also nice, I look forward to the continuation. Good work. |
Great imagery, it really draws you in. A great start to a story. I'm certainly interested in reading what happens next! |
by Sora
Nice work!! I could picture every line! Poems such as these keep the reader interested, i can't wait to read what comes next. keep writing! you have much talent. 5/5 |
by E <3
I wanted to comment, because we are in the same club. And you said you wanted someone to read your poem, but they didn't have to comment. |
by Wake
Aha! Ha ha! (thats not me laughing, thats me going "Oh Wow" In my vocally retarded tone.) |