by ilikepurple222 Feb 20, 2010
category :
Sadness, depression /
lost relationships
We watch others around us wander; |
I really liked this. I could feel the pain that you were feeling. The only thing I would recommend would be everytime you start a new line starting with a capital letter it looks more neat that way. Other than that though I really loved this poem, and I thought the flow was really good. Keep up the good work. 5/5 |
I liked this it was done really well, I actually ended up reading it twice once to myself and then slower and outloud. It always seems like one person gets hurt more than the other and while one struggles to move on the other does with ease. I too sometimes wish I could go back and recreate a few moments of love and life. Fantastic job 5/5 |