Okay. Okay. I can tell immediately you ran out things to say; your poem was short and forced.

First of all, a poem isn’t necissarly about rhyming; if it doesn’t work or sounds forced, don’t use it.

And then not only did the poem HAVE to rhyme, it took away the meaning to it; you couldn’t get your full ideas across because you were too worried about rhyming.

And also, where’s the punctuations, and pauses to breathe, and pauses for emphasis? They’re non-existing. And that’s not good; you want to help your reader read it like you’re MEANING it to be, as if you were going to read the poem allowed to every one in the world that reads it. Infliction is a very big part of writing; you have to give the reader a visual so they know when to pause so they don’t get confused, don’t get tired of reading, and so on.

Now, enough with the criticism. I [did] like the idea of the poem; to me (for every poem means something different to another), I read you talking about the importance of the world; how news gets around and what we’ve become. And yes it is kind of sad. But what can we do? We’re in an age where everything’s new one moment and the next, something EVEN BETTER comes out. It’s stunning, almost, if we weren’t losing the our values; we’re too worried about the media that our morals have gone down the sink. Now THAT’S the sad part.

Overall, I enjoyed the poem all for it’s meaning. You didn’t give me a break, you didn’t care about flow - you just HAD to rhyme - and because of that the poem suffered.

Honest judgement? A three. But, I’m not one to kill people’s ratings; I won’t vote, simply for this reason; if you’d like me to vote a four, let me know.

xTheEcstasyofSuicidex

Sorry about the punctition funniness in the comment... i'm not sure what happened! :/.

This was different and very clever, true that we see only what the media wants us to see or read. I think those smart enough to get their own answers do and the media becomes a joke. I have a suggestion for your 7th line, maybe removing a word or saying "In truth we're" that way theres room for hoarded and it doesn't get stuck on another line.... makes it look weird haha nicely done though as always 5/5

I thought your poem was original and thought provoking, Mr x's comments just don't make sense as the rhyming pulls your poem together and makes it that much more readable. Mr x seems to have a rhyming fixation???
Excellent read 5/5 Ray S

This piece holds so much truth. Leaves the reader really thinking. I enjoyed the read :)
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Cindy

This poem is really good. Its short but you get right to the point of things. The flow is really good and the rhyming isnt forced. 5/5

Important message, I think. Media is evil, and we must look beyond it and find truth for ourselves. Hopefully someones eyes will open up after reading this poem of yours, and have a second thought at what is being fed to them.

I never did like the news. Too depressing. There should be a happy news channel or something... with headlines like "Bunny Found A Home!!" or "Poodles Learn To Dance!" Goodness, wouldn't that be something? I like your poem. It is just what people want to see I suppose... Look at something more depressing then their own lives. hehe???..?