Destroyed Dreams (Tanka)

by Cindy   Feb 24, 2010


Destroyed Dreams

Lost ....shackled, alone.....
Will broken, pain calls it home.
Fate destroyed love's dream.
Haunted nightmares, stealing life.
Descending into darkness......

Tanka is a classic form of Japanese poetry related to the haiku with five unrhymed lines of five, seven, five, seven, and seven syllables. (5, 7, 5, 7, 7)

Written for a club challenge

Written by Cynthia Graver
Feb 22, 2010

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  • 14 years ago

    by Lana

    Very descriptive piece you have penned here. I especially liked your last line for it summed up all the feelings previously listed. Very well done.

  • 14 years ago

    by Kuro

    I think i would like to try a Tanka someday. nicely descriptive word choice. pretty dark sounding

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    i like it :D

  • 14 years ago

    by anand singh

    First let me say congratulations on the win Cindy.It is most deserving of you.
    Secondly, the emotions within this sad piece is clear and heartfelt.You have a way of expressing deep emotions in the verses you create Cindy.
    This was a job well done.
    An enjoyable read.
    Paul...

  • 14 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Nice job on this form! I like the pauses...it was unique and added a little something different to this form and I think it made a greater impact. Congrats!

  • 14 years ago

    by Corinne

    Congratulations on your win Cindy. More strong writing that has come to be expected from you :-)

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