Comments : Destroyed Dreams (Tanka)

  • 14 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    I really find this form on the tougher side but wonder how easy you made it. Dark & sad enough to give you goose bumps.

    all the best and take care

  • 14 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Haunted nightmares stealing life
    Descending into darkness

    ^^The image here is chilling, nightmares
    does steal a life leaving us alone..very well
    penned!

  • 14 years ago

    by Sylvia

    Cindy, you did a good job with the form. The poem is dark and made me feel that way when I read it. I feel a heaviness as I read each word. Well done.

  • 14 years ago

    by Lu

    Such a sad read Cindy. I feel your words so much because I know they come from deep within.

    Fate destroyed loves dream
    ^^^
    This one I could feel the most because I know how deep that love is ... ~hugs~

    Very touching read
    Well done on the form as well !!!!!

  • 14 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Definitely a sad and dark write but very well done indeed. You can feel the writer's pain, emotion, everything. *hugs*

  • 14 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    /Fate destroyed love's dream.//
    that is so so touching...and it says all... the depth and sadness could be felt in this beautiful line...

    beautiful Tanka ... wonderfully penned.

  • 14 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    /Fate destroyed love's dream.//
    that is so so touching...and it says all... the depth and sadness could be felt in this beautiful line...

    beautiful Tanka ... wonderfully penned.

  • 14 years ago

    by Lu

    Congrats on the front page win Cindy !

    Very deserving win indeed ~hugs~

  • 14 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Congratulations on your win dear, wish you would have been here to enjoy the moment..but am sure you will be here soon.

    all the best and take care

  • 14 years ago

    by Corinne

    Congratulations on your win Cindy. More strong writing that has come to be expected from you :-)

  • 14 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    Nice job on this form! I like the pauses...it was unique and added a little something different to this form and I think it made a greater impact. Congrats!

  • 14 years ago

    by anand singh

    First let me say congratulations on the win Cindy.It is most deserving of you.
    Secondly, the emotions within this sad piece is clear and heartfelt.You have a way of expressing deep emotions in the verses you create Cindy.
    This was a job well done.
    An enjoyable read.
    Paul...

  • 14 years ago

    by Kuro

    I think i would like to try a Tanka someday. nicely descriptive word choice. pretty dark sounding

    ...

    i like it :D

  • 14 years ago

    by Lana

    Very descriptive piece you have penned here. I especially liked your last line for it summed up all the feelings previously listed. Very well done.