A thin line between Love and Hate. [Diamante]

by KJ   Feb 26, 2010


----------------------------Love
------------------------patient, kind
-------------giving, exhilirating, appreciating
--------------warm, peaceful, painful, cold
--------------unforgiving, revolting, flaming
------------------------selfish, sinful
----------------------------Hate

I am trying to step out of my 'four line stanza' type poetry. This is my first attempt. It's a little rough, I know, so I am looking for some suggestions/help.

*A Diamante is a seven-lined contrast poem set up in a diamond shape. The first line begins with a
noun/subject, and second line contains two adjectives that describe the beginning noun. The third line
contains three words ending in -ing relating to the noun/subject. The forth line contains two words that
describe the noun/subject and two that describe the closing synonym/antonym. If using an antonym for
the ending, this is where the shift should occur. In the fifth line are three more -ing words describing
the ending antonym/synonym, and the sixth are two more adjectives describing the ending
antonym/synonym. The last line ends with the first noun's antonym or synonym.

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  • 14 years ago

    by MERCY is never shown

    Dude this is really great!!! i loved it the topic was amazing and the expression was amazing i love thi sone

  • 14 years ago

    by ilikepurple222

    I liked this but i wasn't really connecting with it. i do love the topic you chose. the difference between love and hate is very powerful.

  • 14 years ago

    by Chelsey

    Are you kidding me? KJ this was awesome! Like Karl said, you fooled me as well! I wouldn't of been able to tell if it was your first shot at this form or not.
    You're writing is always beautiful no matter what style it is. Your word choice was awesome. Love is sooooo many words and I enjoyed the ones you choice. And I LOVE how you ended it with hate....Complete opposite feelings, smashed into a tiny piece of poetry, it was great!

  • 14 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    Honestly for your first attempt you did a fantastic job, could have fooled me I thought for a second this was the only style you wrote in haha So many words can describe love, I mean it doesn't really matter what you say it has relevance somehow. So it wasn't really the words you said but how you used them. The fact you started the poem with words of hope and excitement the things we all feel with a new love. But then you finished strong with words of regret and sorrow and that is often how it plays out in real life. I loved that the poem ended with the words we all feel when love ends. Fantastic piece truly and as far as changing things I wouldn't because these are the words you use to describe love and nobody else feels the same way towards it. 5/5 definately

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