Pieces

I wouldn't know what else to say but that I regret not reading this sooner. Your write is so full of emotion it tips the glass and everything just spills. A righteous write and a wonderful read. I would have to agree with KJ that the last line of the stanza before the other two would make it a wonder. 5-5

Pieces.
Only pieces of what I used to be will remain.
I won't ever be whole,
I never was.
I stare at the sidewalk hoping no one will notice.

-Very good introduction; eye-opener. The words of the first stanza really got me interested in what else you wanted to say. Also, I think that the emotion was heard through the voice (which is something that I really love in poems).

They say you can change how you look
but it won't change who you are on the inside;
I'll prove them wrong.

-True statement. Although, I think that this sentence interrupted the flow of the poem. It is not the rhyme I am speaking of, but the format.

My eyes close to block out the light from the tv
that became a comfort every night;
Never wanting complete darkness.
I pray for sleep.

-This is my favorite stanza. Nothing more to say :)

Your words are perfectly written,
but leave mine alone.
I tried to stay close,
but you moved on.
I'm no longer yours,
you don't have a claim.
Love me or leave me be.

-'Love me or leave me be.' <--- powerful words. This one sentence says so much in so many different ways. It shows strength and courage to move on. Excellent.

The pieces only shattered
and super glue won't help this time.

-Suggestion: I think that you should do away with these last two lines; you really don't need them. The last line of the stanza before this would be a wonderful conclusion. BUT it is only a suggestion.

Overall, very emotional and powerful write. I gave this a five because I think that it deserves it. Keep writing.

-KJ

Very relatible!!! Great poem with lots of feeling and emotion! The flow worked great!! 5/5

Hey how bout something happy for once?!