Hansel

by Michael D Nalley   Mar 5, 2010


Hansel, I believe you have a talent
Many of us would call a gift
I have put my faith in music
That's given my spirit a lift
Has your lonely ship ever sailed
With no anchor at the end of a rope?
To a dark place of solitude
Where there seems to be very little hope?
Have you crossed your heart,
And hoped to die?
While wandering aimlessly
Toward a lie?
Have you had a mind?
To sing a sad song
In the sea of confusion
Where you've been too long
Must you leave your vessel?
So very far behind
To search for desired love
That you may never find?

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  • 14 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    This Flows so smoothly.
    And excellent rhyming
    No diffucult words
    no metaphors
    just a lovely poem..
    full of wonder
    Well done.

  • 14 years ago

    by XxBabii GirlxX

    Wow!! nice work.. u can tell by this poem that the friendship is realy deep.. Great job =]

  • 14 years ago

    by WakingFreedom

    Coolio dudio. Nicely written. It was all up and chipper then down the spiral it went into gloom and boom. Very crafty and very well done. 5-5 yah?

  • 14 years ago

    by january friend

    I absolutely loved how the first four lines were happy, then the poem seemed to take a sudden turn. incredible, i love poems like that. i also love the lines "Has your lonely ship ever sailed / With no anchor at the end of a rope?"
    some things you might take a look at: in the 8th line, i would either say "little hope" or "no hope"
    in the 16th line you might say "Where you've been [for] too long
    and in the 19th line you might add a syllable "To search for [a], [one] desired love"
    anyway just something to think about. i don't know, the count just seemed off in these lines. but even if you don't change anything, its still a great poem

  • 14 years ago

    by Cale

    I really like this! It shows a deep friendship!!! 5/5

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