Loved You...

by WakingFreedom   Mar 8, 2010


Written on this sheet of paper
The four words that I need most
Not so simple to say or hear
But the freedom of it all floats
On silhouetted skies
And shattered dreams
From the millions of angels falling,
Wings ripped from their sewn seams

I wanted to say
Since all those months ago
That the love that was once there
Just vanished with the echoes
Of the beating heart in me
Once it was strong
Now it is weak with
What I know is now wrong

Save me from the claws
Of inhumanity and leave
The look on your face
Can never bring me release
From the power I hold
To just walk away
Into the billion of faces
That roam around today

You are all that held me back
From what I was meant to be
From flying high and sinking low
Into the right skin that fits me
I don't want to suffocate
In the barriers of your needs
I don't want to die
With out having to succeed

Today is the day I speak
Out loud with true words
From the bottom of my heart
That kept me out of the real world
Today I sign this goodbye
With a smile of the truth
What I meant to say along was
I never loved you

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  • 14 years ago

    by H E Losey

    To begin let me say that I enjoyed your words and the meaning you placed behind them. I would have preferred that your rhythm/metre be more consistent throughout and that you sought a little assistance with a couple grammatical aspects. I guess this is my being old and "old school" in my poetry.

  • 14 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    Very nicely written. Your words were beautiful, and your word choice was great as well. You put such emotion into this piece, and I was lured in from the beginning. The flow was great, and

    I don't want to suffocate
    In the barriers of your needs

    I absolutely loved these lines. Very relate-able. 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Cale

    I loved this poem!! It was filled with lots of emotion!!! THe flow seems like it fit well and it was a great over all poem!!! Great work!!

  • 14 years ago

    by Ray Smallshaw

    I call this type of poem a realisation poem. I think this is one of the best I have read in a long time as it enfolds the longing to get someone off your chest and out of your heart yet it still hold a certain amount of doubt of the feelings you shared with the one you probable loved deeply.
    Though not the best in flow and meter it holds all that is good in an excellent poem so I will give it a 5/5 Ray S

  • 14 years ago

    by Tripp

    Wow. That was impressive. Powerful ending, great imagery...my favorite part of the poem was "But the freedom of it all floats
    On silhouetted skies
    And shattered dreams
    From the millions of angels falling,
    Wings ripped from their sewn seams"

    The entire poem was awesome, but that part just rings, and the image sticks throughout the entire poem. Well done. 5/5 from me ;D

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