Moments so cold, the stars shivered.

by Cotton Candy Clouds   Mar 19, 2010


My heart feels stiff as stone,
stomach's gnarled beyond disentangle.
My eyes are too heavy to let go and all
my emotions simply seem to be mangled.

Anger, hurt, disgust, nausea, confusion:
I can't identify which suits this anymore.
Do things have to always end up like this?
Were we not just in love two moments before?

Our bodies are side by side, but not touching.
The tension is too noticeably unbearable.
Loving hearts are pulled in polar directions.
Is there any feeling that is comparable?

Emotions betraying, stabbing you in the back.
What was just adoration now is argument.
Feelings and intentions are misconstrued,
Nothing is understood as it was meant.

Aggressive words are exchanged
with bold and antagonizing intentions.
Nothing will ever be solved this way.
Yet all that prevails is continuous dissention.

Feelings that make one sick to their stomach.
Product of a fight over something neither can recall.
I would rather be hit to the ground
Than have to deal with this type of fall.

The way he is acting during this fight
makes my aching heart quiver.
Looks and words presented so emptily.
Moments so cold, the stars shivered.

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  • 13 years ago

    by Brittany C

    Good poem. The flow was great and you used a great variety of word.
    5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by Brittany

    You are really good.
    Thast poem right there is wht everyone should read the word choice and quality is amazing :]
    keep writing
    i rlly rlly liked this
    vote 5/5

  • 14 years ago

    by MERCY is never shown

    "The way he is acting during this fight
    makes my aching heart quiver."

    i like this cuz it really shows how one sided we see things during a fight with someone we care about

    "Looks and words presented so emptily.
    Moments so cold, the stars shivered."

    this was my favorite line cuz i know that feeling all to well and the sensation it brings is so wrought with undetected feelings it makes you sick wich you captured well in this poem in was short and to the point which some people prefer its all a matter of the reader its simply a glimpse at the night which kinda leaves you to play out the rest in your head but you did a great job!!

  • 14 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    I absolutely love the title, that's what made me stop to take a look, but I think you could do some reworking in your lines, some of it seems forced and it didn't flow into the rhyme well. I like the basis, as it is a subject I think most of us can relate too, but the flow was off for me.

  • 14 years ago

    by Karl Wild GG23

    Its funny how easily "love" can just end and it happens so often. I never understood why people who argued so much and had nothing in common ever stayed together in the first place. Its almost as if couples just look for things to fight about. The poem was excellent and really described most relationships I believe. I thought the title was very interesting and unique and the flow within the poem was great as well. Nicely done 5/5

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