Ms.razor blade and mr sissors

by ShIsAnA tHe OnE aNd OnLy   Mar 24, 2010


I would like to introduce
you to my best friends
Ms.Razor blade and
Mr.Scissors.

I yelled to my parents
when they finished fighting.
I held ms razor blade in one
hand and Mr.Scissors in the
other.

I did this while my mother
yelled at my father"what
did i tell you?!?!shes suicidal!"

I put Mr.Scissors down and say
"You disobeyed my wish."
...
Daddy cried "Honey please stop,
this isn't funny!

"hm-mm...I laughed and said
wow dad you finally said
something that makes sense!
does that make you mad?"
...
He responded with a nod.

I grabbed Ms.Razor blade
and cried
"This is it!...this is the moment
we have all been waiting for!"

my thoughts were dried. I put
Ms.Razor blade at risk and
finally made a mark so deep
That I was afraid
...
I desperately felt around looking
for Mr.Scissors and finally found
him, I said "lets finish this once
and for all!!"
....
I stabbed Mr.Scissors in my vain
and dabbed it all the way in,which
caused unnecessary screaming...

I opened Mr.Scissors and yelled even
louder.
...
I tossed a pen at my parents and
they cried
"What the f#ck did you
do?!?!now we cant help you!!"
...
then, I said,
"Please....
Just stop!!!
I don't need your help!!and you
did this with you're constant fighting
and screaming!! I no longer exist!!"
.....
There and then,
... I died.

"please...
just stop!!"

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  • 14 years ago

    by Faye

    Needs some spelling Help but I love the flow the way it is. A poem is what you make it & what YOU recieve from it. If someone reads it wrong and don't like the flow thats their fault. Poems are from the heart and you did a great Job! I totally understand what you were saying. Once again tho, spelling. but thats all the flaws I saw. 5/5 =-)

  • 14 years ago

    by Nobody

    I think you have something here, and there were parts that were really good, and the title is very intrigueing. But I would edit more if I were you, and maybe have a more variety of word choice. In poetry the words you use and how you use can make the piece impeccible. Hopefully that helps :)

  • 14 years ago

    by heartless

    I agree with Second to None, it is good and you do need to find a way to make things flow better

  • 14 years ago

    by Second to None

    Okay, i definatly see where your going with this and i see what your going for. its just a little hard to understand and reead. but i think you just need to go over and analize allllll of your spelling and maybe find some way to break it into paragraphs just like skip a line for dramatic effect or somethingg. but all in all this was a pretty spiffy writee(: