Melissa,

a few days a go I was discussing with a friend on this site that i've been struggling to write as of late, we were talking of inspiration and we came across a common factor, we both turn to you for inspiration.. I know I am not a constant commenter on your work but I absolutely never stop reading.. You always impress me with your elegance.

I like the fact that you have been experimenting within your poetry. Usually I am not too fond of use of words written like the would represent their meaning, however I didn't have a problem with it here.. I liked how you used the far away at the beginning and the end.. I just wasn't as fond of the "bre/ak" even though I thought it was clever. I guess it distracted my eyes for a moment, but I still found it to be a distinction in the poem which made it interesting..

The first stanza was my absolute favorite. It was lovely..

The only thing that I was unsure of in this poem was the word "happenstance" I felt like somehow it made the flow uneven.. I think something such as coincidence would be a little better but I understand what you mean about using the same words over and over..

Other than that I adored this piece, how could I not? you write and I feel it. That is what I love about your poetry.

Well done.

-Mel.

By the way, i'd like to thank you for the comment you left on my poem.. I appreciate it. As I mentioned above I have been struggling as of late to write without using the same themes I usually do or the same words, it is like a war within myself lol.. but i'm trying. Thank you once again.