U made a mistake at (I pity you, because fot the rest of your life) i think ur meant to say FOR the rest of your life, but anyways poetry is about conveying your deep thoughts and u did that i read a lot of poetry and some was excellent yet it lack something, genuine emotions. I would also like to say that by reading this help motivate me to become a better person in hopes that when i have a child that they will never feel the pain you did... you’re a very strong person.. .and with God your even stronger.. I sincerely wish you the best 5/5