Now that I've seen your dead body hanging from the fan
In a way I envy you, knowing you are a freeman
You've broken away from this horrid world
But now that your gone, my life has unfurled
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Omg,Excellent rhyming
Really adore it
ITs a really sad poem
But its beautifully written
Just,good way to get the emotions out.
Whatever is wrong...i hope your doing well
-hugs-

I really enjoyed the imagery you used in this poem. My favorite line was "In a way I envy you, knowing you are a freeman". I felt like you could have perhaps expanded on why the subject killed themself, but I think you did a good job in expressing how you felt towards it. Some of the rhyming seemed a little forced "world, unfurled" but overall it was a very nice poem.

Wow i loved it!is this really true??some1 hung thereselfs??? im sorry if it is, i loved this poem though!! 5/5 if u would make it longer id have a better time enjoying it

Very vivid and deep. tells a sad but thoughtful story. once again great job at capturing my attention. lovely job.

victoria

I loved this poem so much. it's probably one of the best ones i've read on this site. the imagery you created was amazing. i saw the entire scene in my head from beginning to end. amazing job!!! this was sad and it really speaks to the reader. :)

Wow, great imagery. I hope this isn't a true story that would be so sad. It has a great flow up until the last line, it just seemed a little disjointed to me for some reason, but it's still a great poem.

One thing in this line 'Deliriously, I searched for a nonexistent heat beat' did you mean heart instead of heat?

I am now going to go read more of your work.

*Kitten*