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by victoria
I really liked the story line about it. Good choice of words....the only advice i would give u is to divide ur poem up into stanzas. It will make it easier to read.=]. I loved how u compared a person to glass because its true. we are all fragial. |
by Kuro
Let me try and re-organize this for you. |
by Shadow Heart
Very well said, i really like this poem. |
I really like your way of writing, abridged stanzas, the inconsistency of the lines of each stanza, the extraordinariness in general, they make the poem all the more interesting. Just imagine if all our poems are all alike, BORING! Anyways, I think you did good in this one, no, very good :) Keep in touch. |