Jenn,

You know what I love about this piece.. The fierce rhyme. While the poem is of course filled with so much emotion.. the rhyme was raw and just rolled off my tongue.. I adored that about this poem. Really thick and intense. Usually i'm not a fan of a poem that rhymes because they can feel quite over-used.. but I didn't get that from this poem at all.

I loved the use of the sun and moon.. Sadistic sun what an awesome alliteration.. I liked how you juxtaposed these two elements of nature to create something dark. The other thing I enjoyed about this poem is how it can be interpreted in many different ways to the reader... While it mentions death, and graves and such, to me it could also be the metaphor for a relationship ending which is interesting.

Another great read. -Mel