Comments : Benighted Conscience

  • 14 years ago

    by Yakari Gabriel

    And I a lighthouse -
    on the eve of tide
    guiding his oragami heart
    innoculously home
    ^
    absolute genius.
    this piece is so lovely.
    i loved the ending as well.

  • 14 years ago

    by Cindy

    Beautiful poem

    Like Kraken his arms were
    - of subtle tentacles.
    An endless knot to
    bound eternity..

    and I a lighthouse -
    on the eve of tide
    guiding his oragami heart
    innoculously home

    The imagery in this piece are awesome. The picture you have painted for the reader with your words is so beautiful. You did a excellent job.
    Congrats on a well deserved win :)
    Take care
    Cindy

  • 14 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Congrats on the win! This was a very well deserved poem to receive a win this week. You always write such thought provoking pieces, you have a unique way with your words. Never have I had to not think about what you were writing, Love it. Awesome work.

  • 14 years ago

    by Corinne

    Your writing is always so powerful, so well crafted - but without being forced - It flows with ease.

  • 14 years ago

    by Lu

    To the sun, I apologize;
    for the moon, has my heart.
    ^^^
    Love these lines Mel !!!

    Such uniqueness ...
    that they just sink in to your heart and remain.

    Very deserving of the front page win !

    It holds everything a poem should have ... amazing created imagery ... wonderful word choice ... captivating title

    Wonderfully penned from beginning to end!

    Loved .. love .. loved it

  • 14 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    Like Kraken his arms were
    - of subtle tentacles.
    An endless knot to
    bound eternity..

    ^This was one of my favorite parts Mel, I have not been much for reading lately, but for me this piece, holds hope and makes me feel like you can hold memories, but let go and save yourself at the same time, from a personal standpoint anyway.

    Great work.

  • 14 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    I'm commenting again because I stumbled across your poem once again and reread it. Repetition of a line or two was truly brilliant, the ending with a question always provokes thoughts of the reader. Origami heart really caught my eye; some real flawless descriptions. Brilliant.