Meena, you did justice to the form and that makes me feel very good. You message is powerful and it is true that sadness grabs us and can slay our souls. Well done.

Good job with the from. :] It had good emotion in it and was vivid. Good job and keep writing.

Oh cool! i didn't know Silvia came up with her own form. nicely done. i bet it was hard to rhyme so many times without it sounding howkey.

Very touching and beautiful write

/Pillow hears night tales which comes to lay
dried out heartaches dawn displays//
^^ totally loved these lines... well written :)

Interesting format. I think you did a pretty good job in using the format to compliment the topic that you have written. I really love your last stanza, I like how you use the pillow as a comforter where we seek solace in. The tear stains acts as a testimonial of how many times we cried. Certainly a nice way to end this poem:)

Gorgeous poem x

I envy those that can write within a strict form including syllable counts, I just don't have the patience myself and feel too constrained. Well penned piece that forces the reader to understand the way in which it was intended to be read; can't be rushed, pauses for effect and thought.

This was an incredible poem. Not only did you stick to a difficult form, but you gave the poem life and soul and meaning beyond the form. This poem used elequence, something that is becoming less and less common in our world of pop music artists. Thank you for such a refreshing poem. It was so beautiful that it hurt.