by I Am May 5, 2010
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
If words were only willing to speak what my tongue wishes to form, |
by Hellon
You have some very beautiful lines within this poem and I did enjoy the whole verse...really, it is lovely. My only suggestion would be that you try to eliminated the word tongue a little? You use it three times at the start of the poem...I just found that a little distracting.....still very worthy of a 5/5 IMO :) |