This was a good poem. again, the meter was a little off in some places. you could try adding in punctuation. it's amazing how much just a single comma or period can change the emphasis on a certain thing. it can make the impact of the poem much stronger.

as a side note, i know it may seem unimportant, but spelling can actually affect a poem a lot. i was thrown off some by some of the spellings in the poem.

it was a good poem poem over all though. good job hun.

I like it.
ez read too :)
keep it up!