This is a pretty good poem. There were a few spots where the poem didn't flow very well, but over all it was well writen.

i actually loved this line "That light airy feeling, that tingly sensation
That annoying tickly feeling that makes you lose your concentration."

um....for my advice on this one...maybe just focus on the meter some. i find that reading the poem out loud helps a lot with that. if you have any questions feel free to message me. =3