I found myself today...

by victoria   May 9, 2010


The wind it chills me,
but to me its warmth,
as i lay here dying,
i see so much more...

I found myself today!
as i lie here dying awake!
i can see myself so clearly!
as i slowly fade away!...
I found myself today...

The darkness falls so quickly,
i can barley feel a thing,
i can hear the world around me,
dying as they live their days,
oh...

I found myself today!
as i lie here dying awake!
i can see myself so clearly!
as i slowly drift away!...
I found myself today...

I'm blinded by the light,
that no man has clarified,
So warm and yet so cold,
as the life Ive lived replays the scenes Ive once known,
oh...
Its time to head back home...

Dying as i lay awake,
is where i found myself today.

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  • 14 years ago

    by Dreaming out loud

    Excellent write deep and intense.

  • 14 years ago

    by ShIsAnA tHe OnE aNd OnLy

    Wow i love this piece of work, it made me go to my own word i can vitualize this whole poem but i do agree with "Nema" you should try to fiz youre grammar it was kind of confuseing other then that keep writing its really good

  • 14 years ago

    by Nee

    I'm guessing this is a song, right? It reminded me of some lyrics of a song I cannot seem to remember.
    Your chorus wasn't bad at all. I just need to criticize some things here:

    "The wind it chills me,
    but to me its warmth,
    as i lay here dying,
    i see so much more..."
    ^
    First line: I suggest you place a comma after 'wind'.
    Second line: Be careful because 'its' means something else, so you need to write it 'it's' or 'it is'.
    Last two lines: make sure you always capitalize the 'i'.

    "I found myself today!
    as i lie here dying awake!
    i can see myself so clearly!
    as i slowly fade away!...
    I found myself today..."
    ^
    I was so very distracted while reading this stanza, or chorus if you want to call it so; the exclamation marks confused me and they are useless there. And stop placing too many dots, it's not nice.

    "as the life Ive lived replays the scenes Ive once known,
    oh...
    Its time to head back home..."
    ^
    Same thing here with "its" and "Ive". And with the dots.

    Good work though :)
    Write on!