I -

who stood like shadow;

conjured his lips -
to mine.
^
You must be the most creative person on earth.
Your writing is so amazingly beautiful
its just breathtaking.
Are these poems or prayers?:)
just so lovely.

Beautifully penned. Creative with an articulate but not over done word choice! Great job!

Good use of suspension: letting the multiple line breaks encourage our expectations only to take the reader to new directions.

Interesting contrast: he who seduced was actually being seduced, yet still left the deeper mark: your scintilla his petrichor.

Yet, godly as he was, engraving his words (image) on your hand (gestalt), you bracketed him to an undercurrent rather than a lifelong torrent.

At the end you remain a strong independent woman.

Very

Wow I'm totally blown away by this poem. I like how you subtly split your poem base on two perspective; You & I. I just adore your word of choice to craft this piece. Excellent Work

I enjoyed the duality displayed in this piece and the structure really made the difference in being able to read it with a flow that becomes very thought laden; each word has impact, and cannot be hurried or dismissed.
Well done and congrats on the win also.

That's the weirdest love poem I ever read in my whole life :D lol
However, I really really loved the imagery in the last part.

"penned susurrous words
upon my hand;
that night. "
^
I love this! Definitely a great ending!

Well done sweetie :)
<3

Congrats for this..

And it deserves a detailed comment..
so here we go

Fantastic; just fantasticcc.
What an outstanding piece!
Perfect word choice; and the expressions
had this harmony-full connection and the way
you separated the lines is VERY strong.

I love this poem so much.

You -

who stood like Night;

^^perfect opening; very poetic
and inspiring. Many impressions can be
granted already while starting to ask
questions regarding the poem.
I love it.

-Reassuring-

painted exotic black skies
to cheeks

^^ this was a very strong line; which actually
completes and backs up the expression before it
!!!

- drunken
by twilight.
^^^this sounds just like a magical; true view.
such a mix. Very admirable meli. I lovedd everything
I have read so far.

and he who whispered
"one should not sleep alone"..

ran fingertips 'cross -
unstable lips..

^^BAH I almost skipped a breath;
sorry but these lines are very sexy haha..
just loved their power; and their coherence.
Well penned..and very describitive AND meaningful.

-drifting-
a flame upon thy neck..
^^
MEL! FANTASTIC; this was just
outstanding. reflects
passion; anxiety and urges..
love and yearnings.. i love it and love
how passionate this feels..

I -

who stood like shadow;

conjured his lips -
to mine.

^^makes it feel so lovely; how
this person can be anything
but NOT a burden..love-full. And attractive

As the sound of
-bittersweet wind chimes-
devoured sleeping stars;
in dulcet memories.
^^^you have no idea? how romantic this stanza
is. Very romantic; and very original.Extremely credible
and something many can/will relate to.!
Perfect word choice and very very poetic.
This is poetry; by all it meas.

My scintilla -

"one should not sleep alone."

penned susurrous words
upon my hand;
that night.

^^what an ending?
I love how you repeated that line;
but what I love more is the surprising ending lines.
A diff. impression actually.

Very impressing.
Hope you are proud of this.
STrong piece 5/5