This poem again is like a story... This time about a soldier at war I guess. The rhyming and images you created again made it flowless and unique, seems like you really have some potential in you :) Nothing bad I can say about this piece again... Nice work 5/5

This is a very good and extremely poignant poem. I love the imagery you used, and the repetition was used very effectively here. The power of death and the visual power of seeing death is extremely frightening and yet realistic and definitely strikes a chord or two. My favorite parts are when you talk about gripping the gun, because I can picture doing that and gulping with a dry throat. It's scary, but so true. Good job, very good job.