Alright I decided to just pretend it was organized and not worry about the sloppy free form and undeveloped lines. I like the way you write and the way you use your words, but the way you put them down in a weird sort of way kind of takes away from your great ability to write. I personally think its a challenge to make poems with structure and perfection then to just throw it down in any way with no form at all. Its a great piece, but I'd wish for you to consider structering your work better and maybe putting forth a little more effort. I gave this a 5/5 but theres room for potential definately. |
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