Final Defeat

by Danielle   Jun 2, 2010


She hides the fear behind a fake smile
Waving goodbye after a night of festivities
But no one knows that in a little while
She'll scream out with thoughts of painful memories

Every night it's always the same dream
She can't seem to escape this horrendous curse
You can hear her when she starts to scream
And you do nothing...which makes it worse

She's trying to run away from him
Trying to escape the world he calls a game
But when she runs, the outcome is grim
He tortures her 'til she calls out his name

Every night the dream seems to repeat
It's like a broken record that always skips
At the end of the dream it feels like defeat
But it starts off with a single trip

She trips and falls to the cold ground
He gains on her with every lost second
No one hears her, no one is around
He screams fall on ears so deafened

He takes her away to his "car of gloom"
She wishes God would grant her death
This is the part that brings her doom
She wishes to take her final breath

He tortures her and brings her great pain
Making her do things that are so wrong
This is all part of his sexual game
It's her last straw...no longer is she strong

Bang! One shot and she's finally dead
He drops her body on the side-street
Just one bullet right through the head...
Became her final defeat...

**Dani**

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  • 14 years ago

    by Simikiel

    This is beautifully written!! its an emotional masterpiece i loved reading. you have the beginnings of a great poet keep up the good work!!

  • 14 years ago

    by AngelicDecadence

    Hmm. That was an..interesting poem. I enjoyed it, but I was kindof thrown for a loop by the rhyme scheme. I'll admit *meekly* that I've done some weird things with my rhymes before, but your rhyme scheme went kinda haywire lol. It was good for the first stanza, then switched lines the next, then did both the next two, and it was just confusing me. It messed up the flow for me, and while I enjoyed the poem, maybe a little more consistancy with your rhyming would be helpful. You are a very talented writer, though (: I look forward to the next read.

  • 14 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    Wow this poem really stood out to me. I loved that it read like a story. I love the depth off this piece. Very creative and well written and it held my attention the whole time. Again the flow was nice here and so was the imagery. A very strong piece indeed. I enjoyed reading. Keep it up. Nik

  • 14 years ago

    by Shinobi

    This poem is really good, I liked it all the way through. It felt like a very long story... At some parts it felt too long, but the rhymes and imagery words you put into this made it interesting even though the lengh. This poem is sad, about a girl with a prolonged nightmare called life, have nothing to critisize about it, just keep it up 5/5

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