by Shinobi Jun 7, 2010
category :
Love, romance /
desired love
Collapsing all around a forsaken shrine for power |
by Nelle
I really liked reading this. Some parts seemed a little forced, while other parts flowed great. You got your point across and it turned out wonderfully. A little confused on what the actual meaning is, as I took it a couple different ways. But overall, it was really good. Great job. :) |
by Danielle
It was a pretty good poem. However, it felt forced and like it was kind of all over the place. The flow was pretty good though. Try re-reading it and see if there is a thing or 2 you could change. 4/5 |