When I read the title, I had a definant bias in my head about how the piece was 'supposed' to flow. I have to admit, I spent more time trying to figure out a rhythm to it than read it for the words. I walked away and came back to it a few minutes ago and read it like it was poetry. Personally, I like the poetry better. It makes its own flow when read like poetry, and doesn't distract the reader. Good Job, and keep writing!

Yo ur so freaking good haha I love this poem sooooooo much