by Minkus
From tall trees to endless pit |
by paige
Gorgeous piece x |
5 |
by Cyber Saiyan
First line, i thought the PIT should be plural to match the use of TREES; either they should both be singular or plural. Minor detail, but worth mentioning. I think the PIT / DEFEAT rhyme was too forced here. Either rhyme them all or none, buy these lines did not ryhme very well and it affected the flow some. |
I enjoyed reading this |
by Yrem Crish
Great work..deep and emotional..keep up the good work-=) |