This poem is pretty good if you ask me. There's some really nice lines in here.

"lips that could make a saint cringe,
for a moment to admit sin."

This is pure brilliance, honestly. The ending however I was not a big fan of, although it fitted nicely with the rest of the poem it sort of fell flat when I re-read it. The second stanza is so packed with wonderful imagery and I can almost feel the emotion you project on my skin.

The ending is good, but it could be better with some adjustment. Keep in mind that this is soley my opinion and pay no heed to it if it doesn't fit in with your vision for this poem.

--ares