Hello...beautiful poem...i can relate very well.

You either broke the rhyme, or didn't really intend to. I was just getting into the flow when it went other way. A nice piece just the same. Your distress came through.

Ik what u mean Mr. Rhee, about the broken flow i just couldn't think of how to put it at the time and it was a quick write. i intend to fix but when the right words to explain it come to me.

I like it.. alot. :)

I liked it thoght it flowed good and made me think what's the secret lol good job

It was good, made you wonder what the secret is. I would recommend changing the 2's to "two"'s as well as "but that's when it matterED" :)

Jessie