Each verse of this could stand on its own with its own special message. We as humans do deny ourselves pleasures and at times just watch from the sidelines as others enjoy them. Well done.

Your words were perfect & conveyed a real message of life. Awesome write

Simple yet effective construction, easy to read and a theme that most can relate to without difficulty. Nice job.

That is a wise poem you know. its flowed so well, and the thoughts been profound yet explained clearly.

and to go deeper to the concept well..it is but a wise step some times to be only watchers...tho some would leave a strike in the heart. :)

well done
i like ur work
5/5 sure

Sometimes it does seem as if others have more than us and while we struggle they are handed everything on a silver spoon but, we become stronger through working towards our goals.

I absolutly loved the last line. I feel like that everyday. Watching ppl "live" there life while all i do is watch. Brilliant.

victoria

I agree with the comments above. This poem was awesome!! The last stanza was my favorite. Especially the line, "Watching others from the outside". Awesome piece! 5/5.:)