"Early summer dawn
yesterday is foregone
fresh warm breeze
awakening birds and honeybees"
I loved this opening stanza, bursting with flavorful imagery on the dot..
"Clear indigo blue mid summer sky
the beaming sun so bright
pure white clouds floating by
blossoming roses;red,pink,white"
The first line was a bit of a mouthful, and did not read smoothly. This is where I think you overdosed on adjectives, you do not need so many to make a poem deep and imaginative. Just take some out and it will be better off.
"Bright red summer evening
so bright and heart warming
the sun just about to fade
staining the sky crimson jade"
You have already used "bright" three times, think of something new, make fresh sparks!
"Stary summer night skies
so wide and beautiful
shooting stars and fireflies
so silent and peaceful"
Again, you have already written "Summer" three times, watch out for re-runs because they will take the reader away from reading..
I did however love the rhyme in this last stanza and the ability to create a calm atmosphere.
4/5 I think more work can be done but it is up to you, this is my honest opinion.