This is really nice. I like how you changed the tune -- love, loss, and love again. It's cute.

I do think it could be better with a better choice of vocabulary -- it's just a bit too simple. The rhymes are okay, but some of them aren't quite perfect rhymes, and some of them are. Not a big deal, just something I noticed.

"He'd always have feelings for her he said.
So there'd have to be a stop before on he led -
Her. Deserved better, but her heart stayed fed.
She couldn't let it go, couldn't leave it dead."

* The first line doesn't flow very well, in my opinion, because you added the "he said" at the end. I see why you did it, but it disturbs the flow a bit. Also, I don't get the second and the third line.. they don't go together. "..before on he led - Her.." I just don't get it.

Other than that, I think it has great potential. Good job.

Five out of five. [5/5]
`Briana (:

This is pretty well done for the most part, the flow isn't perfect but its not bad. I think adding or subtracting a couple small words in key places will make this piece much stronger. I think if you read this over a few times you'll find spots where words aren't really needed or could be changed to help with flow. for ex.

"Something new had been created again.
So much time had passed, they didn't know where to begin.
Her friend was back, and so was her grin.
They both had learned from that wretched sin."

Just going to switch some things around to give you an idea.

Something new was created again,
Much time had passed, where to begin,
Her friend was back, so was her grin,
They've both learned, from wretched sin.

Something like that..... You're a great writer and as you continue to progress you'll learn little things along the way. You have massive potential and I hope to read more from you in the future. You did an excellent job with the rhyming, but be careful you don't get to carried away at times. Nicely done 5/5

A write of love and then loss and then love again. I thought it was good, some lines were long, a few stanzas seemed forced in rhyming. It was a beautiful write, just needs a little tuning. You've got great story going and i thought it was awesome. Nice job done.

That was a reallly long piece, but i really enjoyed reading it Like pingu said, i too thought that at times the rhyming seemed a little forced, however still a good piece. good work!

Such a beautiful and creative piece indeed. I wasn't bothered by the length because you kept me interested the whole time. I loved way it flowed together like a story. Very well done. Nik