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by Rachel RTVW
It has a very catchy rhythm. It reminds me of a nursery rhyme. You need to remove some of the filler words. Those are the words that are unnecessary like all of the Ands...removing them doesn't take away meaning from the piece.
by Sourav
Enjoyable write... Well done!
by Cindy
I really liked the rhyme and flow of this piece. Nice imagery. Great job! Take care Cindy