by Coldstone Jul 26, 2010
category :
Life, society /
other
Dear God... |
by Coldstone
Well said! n thnx:) |
by Siglawoo
A very very beautiful Poem. it is worth reading... but i would like to comment on these specific lines |
by Minkus
You established your idea well. However, the expression of it didn't feel special, as I think a poem should. It felt more like prose with some forced rhymes and line breaks. You can do better! |
by Coldstone
Thanx! i appreciate it:) |
You definately have the potential to be a great writer, but I think right now you're trying to hard. Just write what comes to your mind, it seems like you were trying to make it rhyme and it seemed forced at times. I like the idea and its pretty well done, but its sloppy in certain areas as well. Take your time and sometimes not thinking as much is better in poetry, write with your heart not with your mind. Well done though |