by nmdoza Aug 2, 2010
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Friendship, family /
goodbye
Those days that came without you, |
I like the full circle. The connection of the first line to the last. That was a nice touch. I was intrigued by the first two lines, and for a while, it was good, but I personally, felt that after a while, the poem was just there to rhyme words, and not say something, or tell a story. I must admit, I did admire your use of vocab, as well as some your rhymes. |