And down the oceans deep dim expanse
like a bold mountain in proud enhance
my ship will stand,& sail with continuance ..
Will make from the lightning sweet romance
and the angry waves shall be my ships dance

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This was my favorite stanza, Nana:)

What an uplifing and wise verse you made..I have no doubt you are the master of your ship and a good captain at that:)

* hugs *

5/5 Ingrid

ps: Good luck at the contest!!!!!!

This was a beatiful poem :] and I'm very glad you joined our club. I can tell you have a great amount of talent and I can tell you will do well in PR. Nice poem dear :] keep it up :] Nik

That was really good! a very beautiful piece. I like how it kind of started off a little unsure, with the heavy rain, the fear of the water; it all sounds a little dangerous, but then you completely changed it around! it caught me off guard and by the end of it i was thinking WOW! that was amazing!

"And the ocean shall be afraid on his tide
as the sky & its power comes to my side
bowing to my faith, singing for my grip
storms shall be afraid, but learn from
my sailing ship..."
- that last stanza really just completed the whole poem, it was very well written, and my favourite part of it!

good work :) definitely a well deserved 5/5

This one would make Dylan envy you

Visions Of Johanna
Ain’t it just like the night to play tricks when you’re tryin' to be so quiet?
We sit here stranded, though we’re all doin’ our best to deny it
And Louise holds a handful of rain, temptin’ you to defy it
Lights flicker from the opposite loft
In this room the heat pipes just cough
The country music station plays soft
But there’s nothing, really nothing to turn off
Just Louise and her lover so entwined
And these visions of Johanna that conquer my mind
And down the oceans deep dim expanse
like a bold mountain in proud enhance
my ship will stand,& sail with continuance ..
Will make from the lightning sweet romance
and the angry waves shall be my ships dance

As if my poem is stolen ?

Or half of it shall i say

I love the begaining. The repitition and the word choice are amazing. I love the how you inserted the quotation into your poem. If you were trying to keep up the same AAAA rhyme scheme it didn't really work.
The story imbedded into your poem was beautiful.
I'm really glad that you decided to enter my contest, and I wish you the best of luck.
Thanks for the read.
>~Spirit~>

An uplifitng read this was..it's filled with hope as well as courage..liked it :)