I'm sorry, but I have to be honest, and honestly, I didn't particularly like this poem. It felt forced - the words, the stanzas. It felt like you were trying so hard to get the rhymes, that the lines stubbled and couldn't flow. Each word should be important. As poets, words are our weapons, and we must arm ourselves with the best we can.

Sorry if this seems harsh, but I'm genuinly trying to be honest and give constructive criticism.

Brad

P.S. Please vote and comment on all the poems you read.

Okay thankyou brad