Comments : Betrayal

  • 14 years ago

    by Jim McMillen the man within

    Hi Kayla. Though your rhyme was off on a couple verses I don't see that as too important . It had a nice flow & told a story very well .I enjoyed reading it .
    I would imagine it to have been a sweet release for you after its completion .
    Well done, keep writing .....5/5.....Jim