by Spirit Aug 13, 2010
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Life, society /
other
Hey you, |
by Lady Nik
I really loved this poem. I liked how you didn't break up each form. It makes the piece flow better and it has such an impact on the reader. I loved the way you opened it was well. It seemed so simple and then you changed up. I'm glad you joined the contest, seems like you did a good job with making the forms work together. Great work :] Nik |
by iRobbiee
I really like thiss and your a really good writer... and I think I can learn a lot from you, I can really relate to this and its completely understandable.. Reading this peom makes me thinking about what im really feeling right now |
by silvershoes
Wow, such a simple poem but it rings true in many ways. Easily relatable. I found myself reminiscing multiple relationships that follow along the same lines. Lately I feel as though I've burnt out and one of my ex's still burns brightly; I figure he's long forgotten about me. It also reminds me of someone I am currently in love with - he is a burning star in the atmosphere and next to him, I'm nothing. |