Wowsie wow ! i really loved this!! I love how your words were so descriptive and it painted such a vivid image in my head ! This is an interesting form and i think when i can think of something to write about i will definitely do it ! You wrote this perfectly :D yay!

You did an awesome job on this style Chelz Belz, sounds like he's an amazing guy to deal with what he's been dealt in life, its not easy to care for sick parents especially when he's so young, its quite natural for him to feel as he does... a wonderful write as always sweetie, its great to see you trying new styles, keep up the good work, I'm proud of you... huggers

OMG I feel ashamed no to have u on my favs...which will change now.
Your one of the most talented over here chels..this just gave me the CHILL>>
...such a thought provoking piece that not only revealed ur talent as u penned down a true life story in a very poetic way, using a form..btu also reflected the person beeating inside the guy you wrote about .

I just love this as much as the one b4..splendid..perfectly worded..nothing to moan about..nothin not to love..and everything to be felt..

Decieved, abused, his shoes are filled with holes
^^ just got a ttypo : Decieved should be:Deceived

WELL done
again
5/5!