I pray that your sunshine will weave my words as an artist places images on a canvas when the time comes

That was deep haha

This was a really good write. I could feel the emotion coming from each line of someone taking this cup. Good job and keep writing.

OHHHH DUDDDDEEEEEE ! :D this was greattt ! That last stanza really just took my breath away! wow! Your one kicks mine in the buttocks :P hahaha

Ok hun, I will tell you my opinion and add my suggestions underneath the stanzas:

Bring me the sunset in sleeping cups
let night gently pours, as light fills up
spill it in, with the deepest tranquility
as my astonished eyes sink in ecstasy

^^
gently pour, instead of pours, because night is singular

I love the image of you being spellbound, I love the metaphor you used.

Hold it like a fair diamond in the hand
shining like gold, as dry summer sand
sip me freedom, as I sip the soft power
that lays within the magic of its color

^^
it's color, instead of its

This stanza is magic too, I just love the image of soft sand, diamonds held in the hand etc. Good work here, Nana.

Bring me the sunset in treasured cups
let night shake, as morning brightens up
touch my senses, for the heart to leap
dress me yellow rays, let sorrow sleep

No remarks here, exept, wow!!!!
Dress me in yellow rays is such beautiful poetic language.

as I listen to the ripples of it's orange fall
drown me with beaming memories I recall.
As for my lonely tired eyes, and thirsty lips
bring me a cup lightened by sunset drips ..

This is also perfect, wording, imagery..second stanza is pure magic.

You did well on this, really well Nana...outstanding poetry and you won my heart with it, ha ha ha!

A big ole hug,

5-5 Ingrid

Rania in these few years I have known you
I have watched as you have grown & flowered into the most amazing Poet. your choice of words are so eloquently spoken & expressed , your english is becoming so fluent & your choice of expression is something I would be so proud to have accomplished myself . There are so many treasures that await within you for all to see .
You are a Diamond who continues to shine brighter with each new expression you release ....From what I see here you have taken a hint of pain & allowed it to flourish in the the perfect expression of beauty 5/5 my sweet friend .... All my love , Uncle Jim

Sun Shine, your poem has brighten my some what dreary day. Please pour me a cup of sunset drips right to the brim please :-)

I am spell bound by the imagery... the creativeness and the beauty with which you have weaved each image ...

//Bring me the sunset in treasured cups
// this line itself is so filled with happiness... and it made me smile...

brilliant and beautiful work :)

Sun set - sun rise. How beautiful the scene that we have all gazed upon. It is a true picture of wealth, the richness of its tapestry, the brightness of its warming colours, shining bright, glowing like magical fires warming a world below that is servant to its warmth and its light.

I enjoyed this poem very much. Imagine if you could harness this miraculous sun, its very essence in one cup. How precious would that cup would be? How carefully would you carry that cup? Surely not one single drop you would want to spill. What would be the consequences of such an act?? A sun that glowed less brightly, a warmth that had a chilled edge? Imagine that??

Well done - I like this alot.

Michael

I love love love this title, I was going to try it as well, but no spot left & I probably wouldn't have had time to write it anyways. I thought you did such an excellent job though, one of the best poems you've written to date.

Congrats hun, well deserved <3

First, let me apologise for I thought I had left a comment when you first posted this but now I remember I was running out the door and planned to comment on my return, obviously I forgot!

I imagine if I also had a cup like this I would guard it with my dear life and gaze upon in when life throws a lemon my way.

Perfect visuals and amazing flow made this verse a pleasure to read.

Congrats on you win, very well deserved.

Congrats Nana.....a very well deserved win :)
Love Cindy

Wow.... This poem is absolutely magnificent! It's no wonder you won! Congratulations by the way! I absolutely love this poem. It's amazing!!! I would love to hear about the inspiration about it... Do PM me!!! Excellent job!

I don't know what to say this is absolutely perfect. One of the best poems I've read in a long time....MAGIC!!! 5/5 Brilliant.

This was amazing, and I hope it won the contest you entered it in. I loved this a lot and I think the symbolism and descriptiveness fit perfectly... sometimes everything just works. ^_^

"As for my lonely tired eyes, and thirsty lips
bring me a cup lightened by sunset drips .."

yes mam...consider it done!....;~)

This piece holds such imagery. It is really good. :-) Well done!

interesting specially the last para

Intelligent, delightful and vivid. I love it!