This scared me lol @ the beginning..was too direct which is gd..caught my attention.

i wont comment on the ryhme cause i loved it more b4..so let me talk about the concept of the poem cause i really loved it.. was like a story with some vivid lines..some sharp..some unclear.. and definitely it is a dark one..
and shows that u even have the talent to write stories..if it rings ur bell.

5/5
keep on

A good concept As said but. A good flow through it and good ideas though out it as well. Good job and keep writing. God job and keep writing.

Thanks guys, this is about a ex-military guy who in the war learned how to use the knife. Now he uses it on animals ..... a bit grizzly but those were the men I fought with . You'll look differently at steak from now on hahahaha

...and you are also a story teller too! I liked how you started it off and kept the reader's attention till the end. Enjoyed the read..keep writing :)

I loved how it flowed. It was like watching a horror film the way it unfolded. I loved the detail in the last two lines. It really completes it. Hope to read more by you.
5/5

Svandyke