A very good piece indeed. Your story with captivating. With some poems, I wondering when's the end, but with this, no such thought even occured to me. The story seemed so effortless, due to a seemless flow. It all appeared so natural. 'Twas a jolly good read. Thank you.

Brad

P.S. Please comment and vote on every poem you read

Hi Brad,

There are 13 parts to this story, all of them quick reads , each builds on the next. I have been reading,commentingand voting on at least two poems for every one I post.

A interesting story in the from of a poem but I don't quit think I got the meaning of it. The flow was good from verse to verse though. Good job and keep writing.

Hey Jad,

this is an on going murder mystery. You need to read parts 1-4 which I have posted to understand part 5. They are quick reads.
Thanks for your comments

GOOOOOOO GOO GOOO....im loving these..so much..and thnx a lot for the email..but still
am gna commet over this one..

u have a realy STRONG sentence structure and u no bet have the gift to catch ones interest

5/5never stop

All right !!! Sooooooooo glad you all are into this story. The tongue was a bit over the top but what the heck, Midnight is a sick dude hahaha
Oh it gets better, yes it does, keep reading.
2morrow its part 6 "At the Crack of Dawn"
Keep them comments coming :-)

A dark story if ever I read one...

I have a feeling you are good at this, story telling.

Well written, no flaws, good flow.

5/5 Ingrid