by Brix Ambray Sep 3, 2010
category :
Special events /
fathers day
His soul strengthens mine, |
by Love Panda
The words you have used are very meaningful to the attempted style but for me they arnt glued together enough, it doesnt flow well. The structure is kind of there but it could be better. Instead of having so many short lines i think it would be benificial for you to have two short lines together as one long..then a middle stanza of little lines. Id like to have read some rhymes too. |
by BlueJay
Wow! This is really really good! It is really kind and a good point of what all dads should be like. |
by Brix Ambray
Thank you for reading this poem................ |