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Nice work,

3rd stanza, 2nd line,'my heart slow breaks,' shouldn't that be 'slowly breaks'?

I really enjoyed reading this, you have serious talent, i can't even imagine how AMAZING your writing will be once you get more into the flow of writing. 5/5

It seems to me that in life everything has its purpose , even pain , the question is what to do with the pain, to allow it to serve its purpose the most effectively where you come out on top & actually benefit from it & grow like you never would have been able to had the pain not been a part of your daily life. I have experienced a lot of pain myself years ago & at one time I thought what is this pain all about , It is totally consuming me like nothing ever has before & I wrote this to myself .....
TURNING WOUNDS INTO WISDOM
Pain has to be more than just suffering the consequences of a mistake,
It is the releasing of the hurt, Creating A void , A void that is to be filled with the knowledge of that experience. Those are the two main tools for any improvement.
The more you use those tools the bigger improvement you create.
So if you must experience pain try to gain knowledge from it ............................
Sometimes we fight fire with fire & win ...
Whenever the woods are on fire & the rescue team of firefighters come to put out the fire they back away from the area & burn a controlled fire in a circle so that when the other fire get there it is deprived of anything else to burn & dies off . Then other times like when a house is on fire they fight the fire with water to put it out . I guess my point is in whatever situation you are in you first need to try to see which aproach will help you the best , It is seldom beneficial to fight pain by focusing on the pain it can only be beneficial to focus on it to try to understand it ...When Life offers you ugliness, it is only trying to teach you the value of beauty & give you the opportunity to discover the cause of its demise ....I know when I was homeless & living on the streets of St Louis for a few years I was surrounded bt nothing but ugliness & I chose to fight it by seeking beauty by any means I could find it , whether it was in the smile of a stranger , or a bird singing , it didn't matter as long as I was seeking beauty to focus on then the ugliness was not so all consuming

I BELIEVE
I believe that scars are put upon your heart to protect the tenderness inside
They give you the understanding to know what to let enter in and the strength to let it never get away.... I hope you don't mind my posting this here instead of a comment about your poem But I know when you are past your pain you will suddenly & surely write with an expression of beauty you could never have imagined without the pain because it is the contrast between beauty & pain which will bring your poetry to life ...
5/5.....Jim

You should never fear your self..always believe in yourself because your the only one that's gonna get you through your own pain.. I went through those stages wheree I felt likee nothing was going right...and I did start the cutting..but wats the use? What's the use of hurting yourself when you can hurt the person whose hurting you...that's what someone told me..your poem was good.. It was great because I know how you feel..and trust me don't give up it will get better

I feel your pain