Rise, Rise Oh Sun

This one is so beautiful. I love using the sun because it
is so beautiful and easy to write about. I love the title used in this poem because it flows so well in here.

The first stanza is so simplistic yet so well written because you start out the day with it and the night can be a bad thing. I loved how you use the night as a dark and scary monster per say and the morning as an angel and the sun is the guiding light. Perfect.

Second- I love the continued lines fron the morning to the day. Like you hope its going to be a great day because of the sun. Again I love the sun as your happiness and warmth in this. The sun really is a warm star making anyone who wants it!.

Third- This one made me smile. The imagery is great here because the rains tears is a great line for the dark and feeling alone and the rainbow a symbol for hope and peace. You are saying please help me wipe away the tears I cried and help me follow the right path!.

Fourth- in all your poems I've read your metaphor are great and this one is no different. The sun can truly make someone happy as a close friend to all. Using the sun as a friend is perfect because a true friend is always there for you no matter what.

Ending- Life truly is beautiful and this end is perfect you feel safe overall. I love how you went from having a bad night to feeling happy and safe once again.

I love the flow and rhyming as usual you did a great job and I see no flaws. I loved it. 5

I really like this, it sounds like a song.

A nice piece to greet a new day and bringing new life.

Now this is one of the well arranged poem I've read in a while. I'll add it to my fav. poems....5/5

This had a musical quality about it, like somebody was singing a melody of 'rise, rise oh sun,' in the background. This was both good and bad for me; reading it as a poem it gets very repetitive, and as a result predictable and more simplistic than it should have been. Other than that there were a few nice little images in it