Let us not die peacefully

OFFCOURSE u won..congratulations and no bet I expect another achievement..

anything is possible with u.. "abracadabra"

A brilliant write girl..! and that has nothing to do with us being in the same club. I agree with the above comment, you are a poets poet,
Your poems have always been a joy to read and this poem deserves much attention, It is not full of unneeded flowery metaphors yet has such depth and passion. What helped make this poem so good for me was the naming of the 4 moles, Jenkins, Harlow, Bertie, Blob, It gives the poem so much more humanity, personalized (if that makes sense, which it probably doesn't, but I know what I mean...).It made me laugh and brings the reader closer to you, that we can almost see those moles.....Anyway i'm starting to dribble.....
Congrats on your win its way overdue..

Nicko

I have never read anything by you, Abby...I am glad I became a judge and made myself a promise to read all poems on the list, for I like what I am reading!

Let us die like the day,
glorious and blinding.

Let us die like demons,
bloody and snarling,
heroic and doomed.

Please, let us die
like galaxies, flashing
with the explosions of stars,
blowing themselves apart.

^^^
Amen to that! I like the fire inside of you, that makes you write these words. You are a poet's poet:)

Excellent work,

5/5 Ingrid

Ok for some reason I interpret the repeated stanza 'let us die..' in a way such that to die means to make love. Perhaps to make love without reproducing is a certain kind of death. But I know you're looking at what I'm writing like I'm crazy :)
A little more awkward and befuddling than your usual writes, but as always - good stuff.
To die... Hmmmm.. death of the relationship?

I really liked the way you came about this poem as in the style in which you wrote it. I could feel the emotions throughout the poem beating within each line as I read.

"Let us not leave
silently, head
shakingly, shoulder
shruggingly, hearts
sighingly. Sombre holy water,
sprinkled over those"

This one part in the poem was so outstanding. The imagery and sadness pours from this line so beautifully. Good job and keep writing.